Is this a good starting to a story?

I know it isn't that exciting right now, but is it a good start? I'm almost 13, and I want to be an author. Would you keep reading if you didn't know what happened next? Be honest! Please!



Rinnnnnnnnnng. Rinnnnnnnnnng. Ally stretched her arms out and yawned a huge yawn. She rolled out of bed and put on her beat-up Ugg slippers, and looked at the clock. 12:30. Rinnnnnnnnnng. The phone rang again. Coming, she thought, annoyed. She had been getting phone calls from her best friend, Maya, all morning. The sequel of their favorite movie, The One Who Stayed Alive, came out on DVD last week. It was a romantic movie about a guy who was going to commit suicide, but then met this amazing girl and fell in love with her, so he didn't. They had been dying to see it when it had come out in theaters, but they never had enough time to go. Usually work, or school; studying. They wished they could hang out more often, other than weekends.

“Hello?” Ally said sleepily into the phone.

“Hey! You up yet?” Maya's cheery voice startled Ally.

“Uh, yeah. I'll come pick you up in a few minutes,” Ally said. Maya had taken her drivers test, but failed-numerous times, so therefore, when they wanted to go out, they bussed or Ally drove.

“Great!” sung Maya. “See you then!” Then she hung up. Ally put the phone down and studied herself in the mirror. Her dark black hair was in a tangled mess, and her emerald green eyes looked sleepy. She yawned again, covering her mouth. She scooted over to her closet, and picked out a pair of dark skinnies and a lime green cami and threw them in a pile on her floor.. She also picked out her green wedges and put them beside the pile. “All set,” she said to herself. “Time to get ready.”



“Oh my god!” Maya squealed. “Wasn't that, like, the best movie ever?”

“Yeah. Pretty good.” Ally was still tired. Last night, her, Maya and some friends from school had had a a really late party (until, like, 4:00 or 5:00 in the morning?) and Ally was exhausted. She almost fell asleep in the theater.Is this a good starting to a story?
Pretty good, but add in some more complex adjectives and words.



Ally stretched her arms out and yawned a huge yawn.

Maybe change it to:

Ally stretched out her arms and let out a huge yawn.Is this a good starting to a story?
Yeah, it's fine for an amateur author. Remember, in the beginning of your career, write about both things that interest you personally and things that you know a lot about.Is this a good starting to a story?
its actually pretty good. =]

good job.

keep writing it.
the best way to learn to write is to read good books

and, of course, to practice writing

it looks like you've got a great start

just don't give up on your dream

read, write, keep the dream alive

and study hard

good luck